Assignment due Thursday 2/13/14

But What Was Her name?
Dawn Raffel

While reading this fiction story I was very saddened at the end. In the beginning, it starts out by telling the story of what sounds like a small town. It leads into describing that this woman was a miracle child, a still born revived to life. After that stating she married late and had children.

Reading further into the story, it sounds like the cry of a suppressed woman stuck in an unhappy marriage. It says "She holds her breath. Years pass" It sounds like she is holding back her true feelings in an unhappy marriage and allows for years to pass without leaving or voicing how unhappy she truly is or how she truly feels. The impression I get from the remainder of the story is that she murdered her husband. That she was born innocent and her heart took a hold of her and destroyed her in the end. "She was white in the bed of her birth. The past had taken hold of her- the heart's last sleight".

I enjoyed reading this fictional story, the language and words used to describe and paint a picture of the scenery were a bit odd and difficult to understand. I don't have any substitutions that come to mind immediately but I think the fictional story could have been improved in the descriptive sense by using a better suited choice of words or words that are easier to understand. The tone set the story and allows the reader to get a true sense of the writers intent and emotion.